http://www.flickr.com/photos/photophilde/3049901060/
Badan penari bagai diraut,
Berjoget lembut waktu siang;
Seorang diri di tepi laut,
Hati tenang rasa riang.
http://www.flickr.com/photos/mrwangkai/2543365225/
Bermain riang di atas buai,
Kasih terjalin di mata ibunya;
Korban keluarga tak dilupai,
Balas budi bila berjaya.
http://www.flickr.com/photos/souren72/2972305624/
Kenangan baru cantik berseri,
Jangan lupa ingatan lama;
Duduk di sini berfikir sendiri,
Kenapa kami tidak boleh bersama?
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I love all the three
My only reservation is why are the words so small and looked supressed to the digital forms?
Since you are from new media, i leave it to you to add effect at least make them look compatible the visuals and the pantun
Again the conjunction in the second one may be replaced
Bermain riang di atas buai
because dengan implies a c0ncrete object to follow
cikgu
done! thanks cikgu
korban keluarga jangan dilupai
Can this one be shorter
1. jangan > tak
just a thought.
There rest is ok
cikgu